【分析】本句为复合句，主干为Scott Hahn says…。high-quality sustainable…find为says的宾语。which引导的非限制性定语从句which uses all-organic cotton修饰的是Rogan and Loomstate。cofounder with Gregory为Scott Hahn的同位语。
【译文】Scott Hahn与Gregory同为使用全有机棉的Rogan和Loomstate公司的创始人，他声称，高质量的可持续使用面料仍然很难寻觅到。
2. Most designers with existing labels are finding there aren’t comparable fabrics that can just replace what you’re doing and what your customers are used to,” he says. (2009年6月)
【分析】本句为复合句，主干为Most designers…are finding…。there aren’t…used to为省略了that的宾语从句。that引导的定语从句that can just replace…修饰fabrics。what引导的两个宾语从句what you’re doing和what your customers are used to作replace的宾语。
【译文】他说，“大多数现有品牌设计师发现，并没有匹配的面料能代替你正用着的和顾客们已经适应的面料。”
3. Last year the influential trade show Designers & Agents stopped charging its participation fee for young green entrepreneurs (企业家) who attend its two springtime shows in Los Angeles and New York and gave special recognition to designers whose collections are at least 25% sustainable. (2009年6月)
【分析】本句为复合句，主干为… Designers & Agents stopped charging…and gave special recognition…。who引导的定语从句who attend its…York修饰entrepreneurs，whose引导的定语从句whose collections are…sustainable修饰designers。
【译文】去年，颇具影响力的Designers & Agents对参加其在洛杉矶和纽约举办的两次春季展览的年轻环保企业家们实行免费入场，同时给予那些作品中包括至少四分之一可持续产品的设计师们以特别表彰。
4. This week Wal-Mart is set to announce a major initiative aimed at helping cotton farmers go organ 0 4. This week Wal-Mart is set to announce a major initiative aimed at helping cotton farmers go organic: it will buy transitional (过渡型的) cotton at higher prices, thus helping to expand the supply of a key sustainable material. (2009年6月)
【分析】本句为复合句，主干为Wal-Mart is set to announce a… initiative。aimed…organic为后置定语，修饰initiative。冒号后的句子it will buy…prices即initiative的内容，相当于initiative的同位语从句。helping to…sustainable作伴随状语。
【译文】本周沃尔玛特打算宣布一大重要举措，旨在帮助种植棉花的农民走有机种植之路：它将以稍高价收购过渡型的棉花，以此帮助扩大一种主要的可持续使用面料的供应量。
5. Scientists have devised a way to determine roughly where a person has lived using a strand (缕) of hair, a technique that could help track the movements of criminal suspects or unidentified murder victims. (2009年6月)
【分析】本句为复合句，主干为Scientists have devised a way…。a technique为a way的同位语。where引导的宾语从句where…lived作determine的宾语。using…hair为现在分词作方式状语。that引导的定语从句that…victims修饰technique。
【译文】科学家已经设计出一个方法，凭借人的一缕头发便能大致确定某人曾经居住过的地点，这项技术可能能够帮助跟踪锁定犯罪嫌疑人或不明身份案件受害人的活动场所。
6. Todd Park, a local detective, said the method has helped him learn more about an unidentified woman whose skeleton was found near Great Salt Lake. (2009年6月)
【分析】本句为复合句，主干为Todd Park said…。a local detective为Todd Park的同位语。the method has…为省略了引导词that的宾语从句，该宾语从句中又包含一个由whose引导的定语从句whose skeleton…Lake，修饰的是woman。
【译文】当地的侦探Todd Park说这个方法帮助他了解到关于一具在大盐湖附近发现的不明身份女尸骸的更多信息。
7. He had a perfect résumé and gave good responses to her questions, but the fact that 07. He had a perfect résumé and gave good responses to her questions, but the fact that he never looked her in the eye said “untrustworthy,” so she decided to offer the job to her second choice. (2009年6月)
【分析】本句为复合句，主干为He had a…résumé and gave…responses, but the fact…said untrustworthy…so she decided…。从句that he never looked her in the eye为the fact的同位语。and连接He的两个谓宾，but表转折，so则表结果。
【译文】这位应试者的履历非常完美，并且对她的问题回答得不错，但是，他不敢正视她这一事实意味着“不值得信赖”，因此她决定把工作留给第二个候选人。
8. When we begin to question our assumptions and challenge what we think we have learned from our past, from the media, peers, family, friends, etc., we begin to realize that some of our conclusions are flawed (有缺陷的) or contrary to our fundamental values. (2009年6月)
【分析】本句为复合句，主句为we begin to realize…，从句为When引导的时间状语从句When we…etc.。主句中包括一个由that引导的宾语从句that some…values，作realize的宾语。从句中包含了一个由what引导的宾语从句what we think，作challenge的宾语；而think后又带了一个省略引导词的宾语从句we have learned from…etc.。
【译文】当我们开始质疑自己的假设，并且向那些我们认为是从我们的过去、媒体、同辈、家人、朋友等那里学到的东西发出挑战的时候，我们就开始意识到我们的结论有些是有缺陷的，或者说与我们的基本价值是相违背的。
9. We need to train ourselves to think differently, shift our mindsets and realize that diversity opens doors for all of us, creating opportunities in organizations and communities that benefit everyone. (2009年6月)
【分析】本句为复合句，主干为We need to…。to后带了三个并列的不定式，分别是train ourselves to think，shift our mindsets和realize，而that引导的宾语从句that diversity opens…us则作realize的宾语。creating…communities作伴随状语，该状语中又包括一个由that引导的定语从句that benefit everyone，修饰的是opportunities。
【译文】我们需要训练自己用不同的思维方式去思考，转变我们的思维，并且意识到多元化的大门向我们每一个人开放，这样就能创造机会，使组织和社区中的每一个人都受益。
10. They only come in when a friend drops dead on the golf course and they think, ‘Geez, if it 010. They only come in when a friend drops dead on the golf course and they think, ‘Geez, if it could happen to him, …’(2008年12月)
【分析】本句为复合句，主句为They only come in，从句为when引导的时间状语从句。从句中包含两个由and连接的并列结构a friend drops dead和they think…。‘Geez…’为think的宾语，该宾语的省略号里其实省略了与it could happen to him结构对应的it could happen to me too。
【译文】某个朋友在打高尔夫时猝死，他们会想：‘天啊，如果这能在他身上发生……’，只有这个时候他们才会来(医院)。
11. He believes most diseases that commonly affect men could be addressed by preventive check-ups. (2008年12月)
【分析】本句为复合句，主干为He believes…diseases…could be addressed…。that引导的定语从句that commonly affect men修饰most diseases。by preventive check-ups为be addressed的方式状语。
【译文】他相信，那些经常感染男性的疾病大多数都可以通过预防性的检查来处理掉。
12. Shoppers seldom complain to the manager or owner of a retail store, but instead will alert their friends, relatives, coworkers, strangers — and anyone who will listen. (2008年12月)
【分析】本句为复合句，主干为Shoppers seldom complain to…but…will alert…。破折号在这里起到强调或引起别人注意破折号后面要说的话的作用。在破折号后，who引导的定语从句who will listen修饰的是anyone。
【译文】顾客很少向经理或者零售店的老板投诉，相反，他们会转而向他们的朋友、亲戚、同事、陌生人——以及任何可以听到的人吐苦水。
13. This guidance eliminated the need for customers to circle the parking lot endlessly, and avoided confrontation between those eyeing the same parking space. (2008年12月)
【分析】本句为简单句，主干为This guidance eliminated the need…and avoided confrontation…。eyeing the same parking space为现在分词作后置定语，修饰those。
【译文】这些引导消除了顾客在停车场无尽地兜圈子的必要，而且避免了顾客之间因抢占空车位而引发的冲突。
14. Customers can also improve future shopping experiences by filling complaints to the retailer, in 014. Customers can also improve future shopping experiences by filling complaints to the retailer, instead of complaining to the rest of the world. (2008年12月)
【分析】本句为简单句，主干为Customers can…improve…experiences。方式状语by filling complaints to the retailer修饰improve future shopping experiences。instead of表示否定，其前后成分结构一致，complaining前其实省略了by。
【译文】顾客也可以通过向零售商投诉来改善今后的购物体验，而不是向全世界其他的人抱怨。
导语：要想写好英语
假定你是李华，想邀请邀请外教Henry一起参观中国剪纸(paper-cutting)艺术展。请给他写封邮件，内容包括： 1.展览时间、地点;2.展览内容。
注意：1.词数100左右;2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯
分析：
第一步：审题：1.确定文体：题目中明确要求写邮件邀请Henry，所以用书信体格式。 2.确定时态：参加艺术展，还没有去展会也尚未开始，用一般将来时;此外介绍剪纸艺术应用一般现在时。3.确定人称：题目明确要求“假定你是李华”，所以用第一人称“I”。
第二步：扩展：题目中并没有直接告诉我们展览的细节，所以我们必须要将其展开。时间、地点自己来定，当然中国剪纸艺术展举办地点不能太“小”，选一个既大气自己又会写的单位，时间最好选在周末。此外，其它细节得自己来添加，否则字数远远不够。比如展会的门票收不收费，展会的内容有哪些，可不可以拍照留念等等。
第三步：结构：最好将整篇文章分成3~4段。
Dear Henry,
On behalf of our class, I am writing to invite you to attend an art exhibition on traditional Chinese paper-cutting. Here are some relevant details about it.
To begin with, the art exhibition is going to be held by the National Museum at 9:00 a.m. this Sunday. Besides, the exhibition is completely free of charge so that anyone who is interested in paper-cutting can join in. Furthermore, all the paper-cutting works on display come from many top artists in China, including various animals, plants and people of all ages in different coloured paper. Laset but not least, visitors are allowed to take photos, so you can take your camera if you please.
I am looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
点评：1.对于应用文写作要简洁明了，直入主题。2.所给信息必须毫无遗漏地体现在作文当中。3.思维要发散，适当增加细节。4.字数在规定的基础上增加20-30.
高考作文写作，注意以下十点：
1. 在写作之前，首先对题目进行认真的审清，并在脑海中回想自己积累的哪些句式、句型、单词能用进来，这些单词、句型都应是经典的`，不会错的。
2. 写作中，多注意使用起承转合的过渡词，使文章更富有条理，层次分明。
3. 多注意使用定语从句，包括非限制性定语从句。要熟悉英美人写文章的习惯，遇到地名、人名最好用非限制性定语从句，强调唯一性。
4. 多注意使用副词、形容词起到修饰的作用，并注意切忌重复，多使用不同的表达进行转述。多使用高级词汇。
5. 多注意使用被动、倒装、虚拟语气及非谓语动词作定语这样的表达。
6. 学会替换，对不会写的进行替换，换一种说法表达清楚即可。
7. 长短句搭配使用。适当分段，切忌一段式作文。
8. 切忌使用Chinglish，改变逐字逐句翻译的不良习惯。
9. 文章中代词要指代明确，拿不准时，宁愿不用代词指代。
10. 英语单词不宜写得太小，卷面保持整洁，写错的地方只需轻轻划一笔就行，忌反复涂黑。
书面表达评分标准“最高档”要求:“应用了较多的语法结构或词汇;语法结构或词汇方面有少许错误,但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致;有效地使用了语句间连接成分,使全文结构紧凑。”从历年书面表达高分文章来看,每篇文章都有“亮”点,即在用词、造句或段落安排上都有独到之处。要想获得高分就应在“正确”表达的基础上写出自己的特色,写出自己的“亮”点。
一、词汇选择——标新立异
在写作中“较高级词汇”的使用主要是指使用《大纲》上没有的词语、使用通过构词法变化来的新词、使用同(近)义词或反义词等来代替常见词语。
1)这栋房子在芳草街的一栋楼上。
A: The flat is in a building on Fangcao Street.
B: The flat situates in a building on Fangcao Street.
分析:is in是常见词语,而situates in则是《大纲》上没有的,属于高级词汇。
2)在周末我们做很多作业。
A: At weekends, we have a lot of homework to do.
B: At weekends, we have endless homework to do.
分析:B句在表达时没有使用过于直接的a lot of,而是使用了endless。endless就是由《大纲》词汇end加后缀-less变化来的。
3)洗澡间和厨房都很好。
A: The bathroom and the kitchen are good.
B. The bathroom and the kitchen are well-furnished.
在表达要点时,B句使用了well furnished,这比good语气强,也显得生动。
在造句时,“较高级词汇”如能运用贴切自然,哪怕整篇文章只用上一个,也会使你的
二、结构造句——与众不同
在造句时,既要使句子生动,又要使其简明扼要。
1、使用与人不同的表达方式,特别是提倡打破汉语句子结构的束缚而重组的`句子更受欢迎。
1)唐山曾在二十世纪八十年代发生过一次大地震。
A: There was a strong earthquake in Tangshan in the 1980s.
B: A terrible earthquake hit/struck Tangshan in the 1980s.
大多数同学使用了there be结构,这是对的,但是B句却摒弃了常见句式。另辟蹊径而使用了“主语+谓语+宾语”结构,且使用了terrible,hit/strike这样的词汇,更是难
可贵的。
2)你八月十五日的来信我今天早晨收到了。
A:I received your letter which was written on August 15th this morning.(多数人使用的方式)
B: Your letter of August 15th reached/ got to me this morning.(与多数人使用的方式不同,简洁)
2.使用一些强势句式,如强调句、感叹句、倒装句等,增强语句的表现力。如:
3)阿福救了我妹妹。
A: Ah Fu saved my sister.(一般句式)
B: It was Ah Fu that saved my sister.(强调句式)
4)我们看到庄稼和蔬菜长势喜人很是高兴。
A: We were glad to see crops and vegetables growing well.(一般陈述句)
B: How glad we were to see crops and vegetables growing well.(感叹句)
3、句式多样,复杂得体。在写作中应避免使用相同长度的相同句型,而应注意句式的变化,如长短句结合,简单句、并列句与复合句共用,还可使用简化句等;一些较复杂的结构如独立主格,分词结构等也可使用。下面的表达中A句简单句多,而且多处使用there be结构,显得单调、乏味,而B句就有自己的特色(请同学们自己分析)。
5)这是一套25平方米的住房,住房里面有卧室、有洗澡间、有厨房;卧室里有床、沙发、桌子和椅子等。
A: It's a flat of 25 square metres. There is a bedroom in the flat. There is a bathroom and a kitchen in it, too. In the bedroom, there is a bed; there is a sofa, a desk and a chair as well.
B: It's a flat of 25 square metres, with a bedroom, a bathroom and a kitchen. In the bedroom there is a bed, a sofa, a desk and a chair.
三、布局谋篇——独具匠心
在写作中,我们可按时间、空间或其它逻辑顺序来安排各要点,同时为使主题突出,结构严谨,我们应注意学习和使用交代句以及段落的主题句等。在布局谋篇上,2002高考范文堪称典范。请看:
Opinions are pided on the question.
60% of the students are against the idea of entrance fees. They believe a public park should be free of charge. People need a place where they can rest and enjoy themselves. Charging entrance fees will no doubt keep some people away. What is more, it will become necessary to build gates and walls, which will do harm to the appearance of a city.
On the other hand, 40% think that fees should be charged because you need money to pay gardens and other workers, and to buy plants and young trees. They suggested, however, fees should be charged low.
1)该文使用Opinions are pided...作交代句,开门见山,随后两个段落均使用了主题句，使全文结构紧凑,表达严谨。
2)在表述要点时范文还对要点出场顺序作了调整,如“40%的同学认为应收门票,但不宜过高。”前部分作为主题句放在句首,而后部分另起一句放在句末:They suggested, however, fees should be charged low.这样就分清了轻重缓急,主题突出,条理清楚。
3)范文使用了and, what is more, however等连词,在段落之间使用了on the other hand(说明前后两个观点是相悖的),这些连接手段的运用加强了句子之间、段落之间的联系,使文章表达连贯,浑然一体。
4)范文在第二段为说明不收门票的“原因”时增加了Charging entrance fees will no doubt keep some people away.等细节,这也是解决句与句之间缺少连贯性的常见方法。
总之,要想使自己的文章有亮点,吸引读者,在
