题目 关于大学里面男学生和女学生是不是应该一样多
Gender discrimination is always a topic in our society. Nowadays, an issue（应该是the issue，因为表示特指） under discussion is whether equal numbers of male and female students should be enrolled in every subject by universityies（拼写！）. In my opinion, it is benificial to put emphasis on sexual equality. However, the request of accepting same（前面要加the,属于固定用法） numbers of boys and girls in every subject is overly simplistic.
点评：从结构和内容上来说，还不错，符合要求：前两句话过渡一下，交待背景信息，最后表达自己的观点。本段作者是通过两句话来表达观点，也未尝不可。
从语言角度来说，没有严重的'错误，从句也得到了运用，但是还是有错。
There are mainly two reasons for me to say so.（过于口语化的表达。而且这句话就代表了本段要写两个分论点！这不是一种preferred的写法，既然有两个原因，为什么不能写成两段呢？！这样结构不是更加清晰么。） Firstly, individuals have their own rights to choose the subjects they enjoy. Thus, it is hard to say whether the number of these two different genders will coincidentally be the same in the end. Secondly,（这里开始应该另起一段） the society calls for different things from males and females. According to my experience, we have a special school named ”Female school” in our university, the main subjects of which are intermedia, individual image design, photography and so on. Only girls can get enrolled in this school because the main goal of this school is to cultivate girls that not only can stand on their own fet（拼写！） after graduation, but also live a good life while they act as mothers or housewives in the future. There is no doubt that males and females will act different roles in society after graduation.
点评： 结构上已经说过了，最好分成两段。内容上来说，两个分论点写地一般，第一个分论点后面的扩展太少；第二个分论点本身太抽象，表达地不清楚。
语法上还可以，错误并不多，但是好像没什么特别精彩的地方。
Admittedly, up till now, sex discrimination remains a problem. The emphasis on equal education opportunities for both boys and girls is exactly a must, especially in rural areas. However, since boys and girls are born with different gifts and missions, the extreme equivalence is somehow a myth. Only when the gender differences are eliminated can this extreme equivalence come true.
点评： 这段写得还不错，内容、结构和句型上都比较顺。
In conclusion, I admit the importance of equal education opportunities for both males and females. But just like the harm sex discrimination will do, an emphasis on extreme equality of these two genders is also detrimental.
这段写得也很不错。
总评：全文后半部分写得还不错，主要就是第一段有些问题。貌似可以给个6.5-7分吧。
剑桥雅思写作大作文题型分析
在题目类型方面，剑13的四篇大作文中2篇同意与否大作文，1篇双边观点讨论大作文以及1篇报告类大作文（原因和解决办法）。
从题型数量上来看，同意与否类型无疑是剑13的贴心小棉袄，然鹅剑13却未曾出现利弊分析（Advantages and Disadvantages）和利弊分析姊妹版（Positive or Negative）的题目，这需要引起“烤鸭们”的注意。
纵观2018年上半年的雅思写作考试，同意与否（Agree or Disagree）类型的大作文占比较高，而其他题型的占比相对处于弱势状态。并且剑13再次强调了同意与否类型大作文的重视，“烤鸭们”需要在备考阶段注意强化同意与否类型大作文的审清题目、寻找立场、提出分论点、展开思路和深入论证等。
剑桥雅思写作大作文话题分析
从话题大类上来看，Test 1、2、4均为社会问题，Test 3为学校教育问题，并未出现极其冷门或偏门的话题类型，这也是2018年雅思官方已经举办的考试同样突显出来的趋势和特点，社会类问题和教育类话题依旧是大作文考察的主要方向。
从题目审题难度上来看，雅思官方逐渐加大对题目本身审题题眼的设置与限定，进一步考察“烤鸭们”的逻辑论证和思辨能力，除了Test 3学校教育问题题目中的广大“烤鸭们”较为熟悉的绝对化表达（比如：one of the most important），还增设了have to， as well as， too many， in spite of等单词的修饰，这从一个侧面反应了雅思写作考试的审题难度日渐加大，如何准确找准立场并深入展开论证是今后备考的重中之重。
剑桥雅思写作大作文逐题分析
从内容归类上来看，Test 1主要围绕语言及其可能导致的社会问题和实际问题，其实，在剑桥雅思真题中对语言话题的考察频率还不算低，比如剑9中两次提到了对语言的考察，一篇大作文询问的是语言逐渐消亡与生活难易程度的关系，一篇大作文落脚点是在小学比在中学学外语更好。
但是对于语言模块的考察，在剑13中剑走偏锋，考察了语言可能会导致的问题，提出了一个对语言话题较为耳目一新的视角，比较考察学生的思辨能力，话题在大方向上看比较好理解，但是在细致写作中，实际展开的过程需要考生较强的逻辑组织能力；
Test 2考察的是人们生活中面临了太多选择的问题，若轻轻一扫给人的第一直觉是题目极其言简意赅，感觉命题人惜字如金，但往往简单的题目在写作时容易写“飞”，恨不得写得越大越好，还容易动不动上升到所谓的“三观高度”，越大的话题对亚太地区“烤鸭们”的挑战系数是更大的，习惯于大方向思维的亚太“烤鸭”需要将自己的风格真正落地，找准一个细节进行深入展开论证，从而使文章整体得分更加符合期待。
Test 3考察的问题从难度系数上来说，是剑13中最为容易的一篇大作文，考察的话题是非常经典的学科选择问题，且问题比较传统，还是在文科和理科中做选择，在近期的雅思正式考试中，对于学科的话题还考察过选一科还是多科的方向，本话题相对来说比较NICE，传统型出题模式。
Test 4个人认为是四篇作文中最有意思的一篇，也是非常现实的'文章，先给官方采用报告类考察这篇作文点个赞！
本题话题虽然是现实生活中存在的现象，给人第一感觉是非常熟悉、较为生活化的问题，但本质是两个着眼点是两个极端，如何理清二者之间的论证关系以及如何带出其他非题目中出现的因素是相当考验写作者水平的地方，极端的着眼点在段落开展上和逻辑链构建推理上需要在备考的时候多多加以训练。
剑桥雅思写作大作文备考建议
综上所述，一个大大的预防针是：雅思写作考试不再单纯是围绕某一个所谓的“母题”而再展开变化的考试，也不再是使用几个套用的论点就能走遍天下全不怕的路数了。
在大家熟悉的话题上不断展开新的方向是目前剑桥雅思真题中所透露出来的信息，若广大“烤鸭们”仍然采取固有模式学习雅思写作，很有可能出现写作内容太大，任何问题都是往交通、媒体、社会、技术等上靠拢，这种危险就在于往往容易忽略雅思写作考题考察的是大问题的具体的某一个小方面。当写作内容趋于大面化时，容易导致论证干瘪、内容偏离主题的局面。因此，广大“烤鸭们”在备考雅思写作的时候，需要真正有意识地培养自身的审题能力、思辨能力、分析与逻辑展开能力、语言表达能力等。
另外，纵观剑13提供的范文来看，还是只能说无独有偶，在范文提供方面官方依旧是稍显MEAN的。无论是大小作文分数普遍集中在5.0-6.5分，唯独只一篇达到7.0分，且剑13中没有一篇范文是model answer。虽然没有佳作可供参考，但从另一个角度想，广大“烤鸭们”雅思写作分数普遍集中区域也是5.0-6.5分，强烈建议大家详细阅读每篇范文考官给出的评语，通过评语衡量自身的写作，同时更加清楚地了解雅思写作评分标准，才能更加清晰领会自己的努力方向。
剑桥雅思作文评分标准：
Task Response
Coherence and Cohesion
Lexical Resource
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
雅思的4Gates就是其评分标准，分别为“内容”，“逻辑结构”，“语法的准确使用和范围”以及“词汇量”四个标准。
实际案例
根据下面的全面修改案例，读者可以清楚的看到一篇5.5分的雅思范文是如何在修改之前蜕变成为高分作品。
Cambridge 8 – Test 2
Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology.
In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make?
Has this become a positive or negative development?
原文：
Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology.
Yes, the technology has changed the people’s interaction in very enhanced manner. Earlier people use to wait and try to find easy way to contact their friends or relatives leaving far. In past there was no quick technology to contact or to establish any communication between one person to another person. The drawback with past communication systems was that it were very slow and were time taking process such as telegrams, letter etc. People used to afraid to write their personal feedbacks or things to their love ones due to insecure medium of communication. When it comes to professional level, the privacy and accuracy should be maintain but, to that time there were no secure communications.
Now the things have changed around, people from far distance contact their loves one in an easy and quick ways which improves the interaction level between two person. Quality the level of the interaction between people to people, has improved because the people are equipped with high-tec technology which enhances the communication. There are many many medium which are available now such as internet, called cards etc.
The technology has provided the mobility faster which help people to talk or to interact at any time anywhere in the world.
People can contact their friend or relatives any time they want. It has become so easier and feriendly to be in touch with your feriends, relatives even with the unknown people.
原文翻译：
今天，由于科技的发展人们相互交流的方式也发生了改变。
是的。技术改善了人们的交流方式。以前人们总是期待找到方便的方法联系居住在异地的亲朋好友。以前没有高效的技术帮助人们沟通交流。以往的通讯系统的问题是速度慢，费时间，比如：电报和信件等。在过去，人们不敢给爱人写一些私密的事情因为担心通信不够安全。专业的通信技术应该是安全的、准确的，但是在当时根本没有安全的通信可言。
现在，这些事情已经改变了，住在远处的人们利用一种高效的方式联系他们的爱人。这些方式改善了人们之间的交流方式。因为人们使用了改善交流的高科技，所以他们交流的方式已经得到改善。现在有了很多这类媒体，比如：国际互联网、语音卡等。
这些技术提供了更快的移动性，帮助人们在任何时间、世界上的任何地方与他人沟通。
现在人们能够在任何时间联系亲朋好友。和朋友、家人以及陌生人的沟通变得更容易了。
（注：上述的习作存在语法错误和表达错误，因此对应的翻译也有一定出入。）
Sample Answer:
This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 5.5 score. Here is the examiner’s comment:
这是一位考生写的5.5分作文。下面是考官的评语。
The topic introduction has been copied from the task and is deducted from the word count. This leaves the answer underlength at 236 words, so the candidate loses marks for this.
文章的开篇是从标题中抄来的，所以不能算字数。剩下的只有236个字，考生因此失分。
This answer addresses both questions, but the first is not well covered in terms of how actual relationships have changed. Nevertheless, there is a clear opinion that the effects have been positive and relationships have improved, with some relevant ideas to support this. There is a general progression to the argument, with some effective use of time markers and linkers. There is also some repetition, however. Paragraphing is not always logical, and ideas are not always well linked. A range of vocabulary that is relevant to the topic is used, including some precise and natural expressions. There are quite a lot of mistakes in word form, word choice or spelling, but these do not usually reduce understanding. A variety of sentence type is used, but not always accurately. Errors in grammar and punctuation are distracting at times, but only rarely cause problems for the reader.
此文回答了两个问题，但是在回答第一个问题时，并没有充分讨论问题中关于现实中的关系是如何改变的。但是，文章展示了清晰的观点（这些影响都是好的，而且这些关系都有所改善）并配以相关的观点支持。文章的论证循序渐进，使用了很多表示时间的提示词以及连接词，但是个别有些重复。分段不够逻辑，而且一些观点没有充分的关联。使用了一些与主题相关的词汇，包括准确并自然的表达。虽然有一些词性、词义以及拼写错误，但是并不会太影响理解。使用了各种句型，但是很多不太准。语法错误和标点错误有时会干扰理解，但是不会给读者产生太大的麻烦。
修改后：
Nowadays,.(It is true that technology has shifted people’s communicative ways. 利用It is true that的句式突出后面的事件；Change和shift是同义词替换；the way people interact和communicative way是同义词替换。这样的改变可以避免引用标题中的原词。)
（拒绝非正式的`使用方法。）The technology has changed the people’s interaction in very enhanced manner. Earlier people used（前后时态必须一致。）to wait and try to find easy ways（名词单复数）to contact their friends or relatives leaving far. In the past, there was no （词汇使用不当，应该改成effective）technology to contact others or to establish any communication between two people. And（重要的连接词，表示本句和上一句共同解释为什么“人们一直在期待找到更有效的通讯方式。”）the drawback ofthe past communication systems was that they （指代不清，这里指代的是communication systems）were too （表示“太”。）slow and were time-consuming （表示“费时”）, including （这是应该使用分词形式，表示对主句的communication ways的具体描述。）the telegrams, the letter etc. Not only that,（这里需要连接词）people used to be afraid to write their personal feedbacks or things to their loved ones because of （because of 强调“外部原因”；due to 强调“根据”）information security （根据上下文理解，此处应该表达的是“信息安全”）of communication. (They worried their letters might be stolen or read by some strangers.这里可以继续描述人们的担心。)
However，（上文主要讨论过去的情况，而接下来将讨论现在的改变）now the things have changed around.（必须避免使用“，”连接两个句子。正确的处理方法是，要么采用断句的方法，要么添加连词。）People in a long distance contact their lovesd one in (effective and efficient) ways, which improve（主谓一致，which代替ways。）the interaction level between two persons. Quality （用词重复）of the interaction between people and people（主谓之间不能添加“，”。）has been improved（这里使用被动是因为沟通质量的提升是因为技术的发展。）because they are equipped with high-techdevices which enhances their communication. There are many（重复）mediummediaavailable such as internet, called cards etc.So the technology has provided better mobility , which help people to talk or keep in touch with each other at any time anywhere in the world.（不应该单独成段，应该和上一段结合在一起。）（本句应该被删除，因为没有提出任何新的观点，并且与上文的句子非常重复。）
